The Advantages of Apples
The Advantages of Apples
Apples have three main advantages. First of all is that apples can be made into a great variety of nutrition products-- apple pie, apple juice, and apple butter, which are good for our health. Secondly, apples taste delicious. Both my sister and I love eating them. For example, I prefer eating a fresh apple, but my sister likes to put some apple butter on two slices of toast for her breakfast. Whenever I see the vivid colors of apples, I always can't help biting into them. The last advantage is that the price of apple in Taiwan isn't expensive so that most of the people can buy them easily. Therefore, I'd like to say apples have lots of good functions for the health of our bodies.
posted by EVE @ 2:13 AM
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Well done!
Which one is your topic sentence?
Make sure all the sentences in this paragraph must relate to it!
Apples have a lot of advantages, such as apple pie, apple juice, and apple butter all made from apples.
--> What advantages? Make it clear in your topic sentence.
--> it can be made into different products, it tastes delicious, it is cheap...
-->One of the advantages of apples is apples can be made into a great variety of products, such as apple pie, ....
Both my sister and I love eating them. For example, I prefer eating a fresh apple, but my sister likes to put some apple butter on two slices of toast for her breakfast. Whenever I see the vivid colors of apples, I always can't help biting into them.
-->Secondly, the taste of apple is delicious. Both...
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